Rant VII: Now With 25% Less Drama

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makare

Well, the one I was looking at was just friendship.

But I do think TNG might be out for a little more....
 
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makare

I meant the math how we are 64%, which as you said makes a lot of sense, but are both the same with gusto. Is gusto like the middle of our venn diagram?
 
I am having one of those days where I feel kind of lost.

I'm looking around at college and university sites, checking out their programs, trying to picture myself in them. Trying to decide what to do with myself.

Then I start thinking: I'm 26, I have a kid and not enough money. Perhaps I will never be any thing. I don't care if I'm important...I just want to be something.

I hate these low points.
 
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SeraRelm

You're a good* mom. I'm wondering what could be more important.

*(edited in since it matters)
 
I am really with SeraRelm, if nothing else, if the kid grows up to be a decent human being you will have been somebody special, do you understand how many people I come in contact with that are either "bad parents" or the result of said parenting. it is a lot!
 
I am having one of those days where I feel kind of lost.

I'm looking around at college and university sites, checking out their programs, trying to picture myself in them. Trying to decide what to do with myself.

Then I start thinking: I'm 26, I have a kid and not enough money. Perhaps I will never be any thing. I don't care if I'm important...I just want to be something.

I hate these low points.
Colleges are full of 26 year old mothers. Get your financial package (loans and grants) straight first.
 
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SeraRelm

I am really with SeraRelm, if nothing else, if the kid grows up to be a decent human being you will have been somebody special, do you understand how many people I come in contact with that are either "bad parents" or the result of said parenting. it is a lot!
... no pressure.
 
well we already know she is a good mother, so what pressure is there? are you suggesting you were just trying to make her feel better?
 
i guess it was my bad for building off the logical argument of good mother= decent offspring, obviously good mother=/= decent offspring.

I guess I owe littlesin an apology

LittleSin I am sorry, I didn't mean to conditionally assert your ability to parent being based on your sons future behavior. I was trying to be positive as well, but what I said was wrong.
 
Wow. SeraRelm shut you down Bones. I understood what you meant though.

Colleges are full of 26 year old mothers. Get your financial package (loans and grants) straight first.
It just seems nearly impossible. I have a student loan from the last time I was in school...a month before I found out I was pregnant with Jet and flunked. Badly.

I haven't been able to pay it off like I should so I doubt they'll help me.

I have screwed myself.
 

Cajungal

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Just remember to never say never. Even if it's not the right time now, you never know how things can change. Keep working on your art. That is something that's all yours. And yes, you are also a wonderful mother. I am sure you will find a way to accomplish your goals. :)
 
We should swap stories sometime, LittleSin . I'm sure it would make for an evening full of endless entertainment drinking*.

--Patrick
*Disclaimer: I'm not a big drinker. But that's OK, 'cuz it means I'd drive you home.
 

GasBandit

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However, I have never seen the show, read the books, or actually know anything about it. I got Tully is that good? It has a fish...
It told you "you are house tully" and didn't explain why?

I don't have time to take the test but I'm pretty sure it'd say I was a wildling.
 
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I got TOLD yo....

but in all honesty I thought I was being told that I was being rude, so I was endevouring to apologize for my gaff. I didnt realize that was being passive aggressive. I will keep it in mind from now on.
 
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makare

It told you "you are house tully" and didn't explain why?

I don't have time to take the test but I'm pretty sure it'd say I was a wildling.

Yeah it did. It said they were basically the good and loyal characters. I just wanted to know more about the roll they played in the story. From what I've found out they are the good and loyal characters.
 
I just heard back from Camel Press about my novel.

They rejected it.

GOD FUCKING DAMMIT!!! This book will never sell. :cry:

This is what they had to say about it:

Hi Nick,

I enjoyed many aspects of your book, as did my science fiction reader, but in the end we decided to reject your manuscript.

I like the idea of a mutant armadillo hero, but then it can't keep referring to itself as a man, and the sexual innuendo doesn't work at all if he's been castrated. All the pop references (to noir movies, Clint Eastwood, etc.) don't really work in a universe where they never existed. We like your style and hope you'll submit to us again in the future.

You were right to take out much of the slang, which is confusing without adding anything. I'd go even further and take it out completely.

Here are excerpts from my sci fi reader's comments that may help you understand why the book doesn't work for us:

"The pop-cultural references are a cute homage to early noir writing and contemporary detectives but they were not only grating after endless repetition but also confusing. When and where does the setting of this series take place? There have only been allusions in the part I’ve read to unearthly locations and weird magical, speculative futuristic concepts but not much to indicate this isn’t set in an alternate world. If City doesn’t take place in a universe where Clint Eastwood existed it makes no sense that Dill would refer to him even as a joke. Maybe very much deeper in the time period would be discussed. Without the backing after several chapters though the jokes were off-putting."

Pros

-An amusing and interesting main character and perspective
-An inventive and wacky original universe
-Quick pacing, lots of action beats

Cons

-Uneven split of self-contained story and noir spoof
-Protagonist uses too many references and his accent is annoying
-Stranger concepts remain self evident, perhaps leading to confusion

Although this reader was mostly enthusiastic about your book and thought it had major potential, two other readers were completely confused. Sometimes writers are afraid of including too much exposition because they worry about boring readers. However, in your case especially, there is much more of a risk of losing them to confusion than boredom. You have a clever way with dialogue, and I know you could sneak in the details that would anchor us firmly in your universe without boring us.

Best of luck. We look forward to considering future manuscripts.

Sincerely,

Catherine

I have no fucking clue how they got the idea that the things Dill refers to don't exist. I never said they don't and in fact, even mention that his father read many noir books to him and had him watch many noir movies.

....fucking hell.
 
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