Halforums Academy 2 Story Commentary Thread

[GasBandit]

I could take a stab at it, as long as you don't need it in a timely fashion.

Well, it's not like we have a deadline I would, however, like it before the series raps up in.. call it 10 weeks or so, eh?

 

[Gusto]

Well, it's not like we have a deadline I would, however, like it before the series raps up in.. call it 10 weeks or so, eh?

Probably, then.

 

[Vrii]

The Latin from reddit is...bad. Depending on how set you are on the exact wording, something more along the lines of "they're up to no good" would be a lot easier.

Either way, I'll think about it for a bit and see what I can come up with.

 

[GasBandit]

Good news, I managed to use an editor to move Dei and Gusto into baseball without resetting their club points.

 

[GasBandit]

Er, but I forgot to change Dei's club outfit... so on day 16, she'll be playing baseball in her band uniform >_< but it's fixed for going forward after that.

 

[GasBandit]

What do you think of the Ahe Gao durr?

 

[Celt Z]

I like it, but I'd make it slightly more wall-eyed and maybe tweak the corner to it's slightly smiling?

 

[GasBandit]

I like it, but I'd make it slightly more wall-eyed and maybe tweak the corner to it's slightly smiling?

I moved the eyes out a bit, but I'm having trouble getting the mouth to look right "tweaked" to smile...maybe somebody else can take a crack at it. I'm linking the PSD with the layers.

 

[WasabiPoptart]

I think the tongue needs to hang more loosely. Right now, it looks like someone who ate a scotch bonnet.

 

[GasBandit]

I think the tongue needs to hang more loosely. Right now, it looks like someone who ate a scotch bonnet.

Ok, I'll have to mess with it some more when I get home.

 

[GasBandit]

Period 1 video editing done... Man. Not to tease too much or anything, but day 16 was cringeworthy while I played it, and editing it is turning out to be just as painful.[DOUBLEPOST=1423284247,1423284025][/DOUBLEPOST]In other news, is this tongue dangle better?

 

[WasabiPoptart]

Yes!

 

[jwhouk]

Maybe have the edge of the tongue more at a 90° angle with the corner of the mouth?

 

[GasBandit]

Maybe have the edge of the tongue more at a 90° angle with the corner of the mouth?

My Photoshop skills are not good enough to change the shape of the tongue and have it not look like shit. It's harder to liquify an object originally built from thick-line vectors and simple colors than it is something in a photograph :/

So basically, I can move around and resize the tongue, and cut off pieces of it (I had to cut off the top left corner to make it look like it was coming out of the mouth in the latest version), but if the "top" of the tongue is parallel with the teeth, the rest is going to stick outward rigid again.

 

[AshburnerX]

It looks good enough right now to me.

 

[drifter]

Thoughts?

 

[GasBandit]

Ha ha, sweeeet.. only criticism I have is you might want to move the sweat droplets out of the way of the blush (they are movable in the PSD)

 

[drifter]

That's not a problem, but I probably won't be able to get to it until later.

 

[Celt Z]

Thoughts?

I like the blush, but I'd scoot the tongue a bit more to the left like it was earlier. To me, centered tongue it more "thirsty", while corner of the mouth is more "derpy/loss of control".

 

[GasBandit]

Man, it's slow going. Been working on it for hours, only got Period 1 narrations done. I don't think this one's gonna be done by sunday night.

 

[drifter]

Second pass

 

[GasBandit]

I think we got a winner there.

Now we just need to figure out what we're doing about the sucker punch.

 

[Cheesy1]

I was thinking along the lines of a fist-shaped lollipop. This as a close a picture as I could find to that concept:

Maybe a silhouette or recolor of this to represent "Sucker Punch"?

 

[Tinwhistler]

ideas:

Unfortunately, they're a shutterstock image, so 'taint free

 

[GasBandit]

Period 2 video editing done.

 

[jwhouk]

I was thinking along the lines of a fist-shaped lollipop. This as a close a picture as I could find to that concept:

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Maybe a silhouette or recolor of this to represent "Sucker Punch"?

Put a spring around it, like it was bouncing out of a box or something, perhaps?

 

[WasabiPoptart]

 

[Ravenpoe]

 

[Dei]

If we're going to have a picture of any one person getting punched, it should be Mindy

 

[GasBandit]

Aaand I've got a headcold. Which naturally is going to delay production of day 16.

 

[GasBandit]

My cold is getting worse, not better. I think I've started to run a low grade fever.

 

[GasBandit]

My cold seems to be improving! I'm keeping my fingers crossed that it will abate enough for me to finish the next episode this weekend.

 

[jwhouk]

Ever considered doing a closed-captioned one, with a fake language (i.e. The Swedish Chef) as the voice-over?

 

[Bubble181]

Ever considered doing a closed-captioned one, with a fake language (i.e. some Ewoks) as the voice-over?

FTFY

 

[GasBandit]

Man, that'd take even longer.